After some advices, I've made some changes. So, here's the new version of the music (BTW, the presentation was great!) Thanks for the help
Christian, I like this one. However, IMO, it's form is not yet balanced. The 4th section ABAC (which starts at 1'10") is too short. I think you should lengthen it. Then the final section should also be made longer. Simply put, the final two sections are too short for the ABA that came before (the whole piece is only 1'38"). Also, given the tempo and almost moto perpetuo style of it, you should take more time to end the piece, with maybe a nice coda or something to help bring it to a close with more substance. Regards
Thanks, Eddy. Yes, I guess you're right. I should make these parts longer.. ok, I'm gonna work on it. Thanks again
Christian, I think you did a fine job of balancing it out and have definitely improved it! I think you can still think of a different way to end it, however. I don't think is needs faster notes, rather slower (longer) ones: something like 4 pulses (2 bars) of dotted 1/4 notes, followed by 2-3 bars of dotted 1/2 note sonorities. This gives it time to "slow down" and end.