Well done. It sounds a bit mushy and distant, so it's not easy to properly gauge the quality of the playing. I could not say
at this stage whether I "love your playing" or not
But it's promising, you seem to have the measure of the piece. As said, you'll need a proper recording device to solicit more feedback. There may have been some flubs and smudges but nothing that can't be fixed.
I do love Grainger. Such a large-than life and likable character. His pieces can be over the top but many are exhilarating and others are exquisitely beautiful. I'm actually working on a clutch of Grainger pieces and was hoping to introduce this composer to PS in the not too distant future. This particular one I don't much care for (as I never did for the original). It
does indeed have a touch of Liberace, and does not really seem to be going anywhere. But if you like this lullaby to start with, this transcription is fine and the performance adequate.