I don't think you have introduced yourself! In fact I am not sure your name is Tommy, correct me if I am wrong. Are you studying piano in school? How many years have you been playing?
I had a listen to your piece. I am somewhat familiar with it because one of my friends in my piano studio class played it last semester. She had trouble with the piece, and judging by me listening to this piece, you played just awful. And I mean awful. I wish I could say better, but welcome to the school of hard knocks
If you want some feedback here it is; first, there are many
read errors in your performance. If I could recommend you a strategy, it would be to practice
this piece. Not once, not twice, but make a routine of it, every day for x number of hours etc....
I thought your contrast in dynamics were good in some parts, but your tempo and phrasing could been a heck of a lot more consistent. If I were you I would practice this piece with a metronome. It may get boring, but it's the school of hard knocks
One question is, are you playing this on a digital piano? It sounded like distortion in some places and I wonder how you recorded this?
Hope this helps,